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37407 Re: Voklavian Short short Story
   "Other than that, any glaring problems with the snippet?"...
Beldin   POPE IV   25 Oct 2017
9:22 PM
37371 Re: Voklavian Short short Story
   ...twas good, but could use a few more explosions, car chases and expo...
ribit   POPE IV   25 Oct 2017
6:11 AM
37370 Re: Voklavian Short short Story
   Zum, the plot line is intriguing. Just got back from the eye doc, can...
monkeytrots   POPE IV   25 Oct 2017
5:11 AM

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Re: Voklavian Short short Story

By: Zimbler0 in POPE IV
Wed, 25 Oct 17 3:59 AM
Msg. 37368 of 47202
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MT> Interesting. I got lost in the 'and after' section - opaque to me ...


Yeah, sorry.
That does get a little opaque.
The Voklavians are space going aliens. They mine for
most of the metals and other valuable minerals they
use on asteroids - in various star systems where-ever
they might find them.

So they have these space going mining ships spread
across some 160 light years of space. The Voklavian
space fleets primary job is to ensure other aliens do
not seize or destroy the mining ships.

A secondary duty is ensuring the mining ships are
operating safely . . . the crews are healthy and their
equipment is still safe to operate.

Other than that, any glaring problems with the snippet?
Zim.




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