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By: monkeytrots in POPE IV | Recommend this post (1)
Wed, 25 Oct 17 5:11 AM | 63 view(s)
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Zum, the plot line is intriguing. Just got back from the eye doc, can't focus worth squat right now - would need to re-read for style (rather than content which is always my first pass). I had to play catchup with your previous writing on that writer's site - 'cuz unlike ribit's quick wit and recall, I had forgotten. Old age is such a blast, ain't it.

I did like what I read - both then and now.




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Re: Voklavian Short short Story
By: Zimbler0
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Wed, 25 Oct 17 3:59 AM
Msg. 37368 of 47202

MT> Interesting. I got lost in the 'and after' section - opaque to me ...


Yeah, sorry.
That does get a little opaque.
The Voklavians are space going aliens. They mine for
most of the metals and other valuable minerals they
use on asteroids - in various star systems where-ever
they might find them.

So they have these space going mining ships spread
across some 160 light years of space. The Voklavian
space fleets primary job is to ensure other aliens do
not seize or destroy the mining ships.

A secondary duty is ensuring the mining ships are
operating safely . . . the crews are healthy and their
equipment is still safe to operate.

Other than that, any glaring problems with the snippet?
Zim.


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