Zum, the plot line is intriguing. Just got back from the eye doc, can't focus worth squat right now - would need to re-read for style (rather than content which is always my first pass). I had to play catchup with your previous writing on that writer's site - 'cuz unlike ribit's quick wit and recall, I had forgotten. Old age is such a blast, ain't it.
I did like what I read - both then and now.
Finally, brethren, whatsoever things are true, whatsoever things are honest, whatsoever things are just, whatsoever things are pure, whatsoever things are lovely, whatsoever things are of good ...